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(OP) User ID: 2734614 United Kingdom 10/05/2011 08:46 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | When Gold hits $1117 per scrap Quoting: daretospeak and bananas per kilo top $59.99 an order for cigarettes will breach $330, know we've crossed the demarcation line. A storm approaches with forewarning The black hawk, surveying the sheep Super soldiers march at morning Etching a motif, while you sleep. None shall enter the chambers within Unless he bares the motif of skin Better you head for the highest of hills To hide from the order of government shills. Mass hysteria, far and far wide Which way is up? And who moved the tide? Run from the rain, of fire from the skies I've tried to warn you, will you open your eyes? This much I say, this much is true! We must see red, but first see blue. Thirst and hunger, plague and flu Must come to pass before He makes all things new. (c) TROY JONES 2011 Thats me...yes I wrote this. That's wicked cool man. thanx Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
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(OP) User ID: 2734614 United Kingdom 10/05/2011 08:48 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | ... Quoting: daretospeak Motif definition, "a single or repeated design or color". In this case I used motif to describe a single design. so you can "etch a motif" A motif of skin meaning a single design etched onto the skin. I hear you, and your choices aren't off, but your poetry teacher would say, "Meh. Your audience isn't in your head and won't make these 'motif' connections: too cryptic for most. Also, it's repetive: keep one or the other if you must, but not both." Poeple who take peotry classes hear this shit all the time. Still cool. Point taken...I'll see if I can tweek it. Remember, no poem is ever finished...just published. Keep writing for sure. I dont believe the no poem is ever finished part. I think some poems are perfect the way they are....not mine though, mine need work. Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
Anonymous Coward User ID: 1394135 United States 10/05/2011 08:52 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | When Gold hits $1117 per scrap Quoting: daretospeak and bananas per kilo top $59.99 an order for cigarettes will breach $330, know we've crossed the demarcation line. A storm approaches with forewarning The black hawk, surveying the sheep Super soldiers march at morning Etching a motif, while you sleep. None shall enter the chambers within Unless he bares the motif of skin Better you head for the highest of hills To hide from the order of government shills. Mass hysteria, far and far wide Which way is up? And who moved the tide? Run from the rain, of fire from the skies I've tried to warn you, will you open your eyes? This much I say, this much is true! We must see red, but first see blue. Thirst and hunger, plague and flu Must come to pass before He makes all things new. (c) TROY JONES 2011 Thats me...yes I wrote this. Bollox Stand your ground. Nobody won anything by running away and leaving all behind, Save for dunkirque, and that was by an america that died decades ago. Now, it's hold fast, or hope has passed, either way, yer dead meat if you dont prevail |
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daretospeak
(OP) User ID: 2734614 United Kingdom 10/05/2011 09:02 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | When Gold hits $1117 per scrap Quoting: daretospeak and bananas per kilo top $59.99 an order for cigarettes will breach $330, know we've crossed the demarcation line. A storm approaches with forewarning The black hawk, surveying the sheep Super soldiers march at morning Etching a motif, while you sleep. None shall enter the chambers within Unless he bares the motif of skin Better you head for the highest of hills To hide from the order of government shills. Mass hysteria, far and far wide Which way is up? And who moved the tide? Run from the rain, of fire from the skies I've tried to warn you, will you open your eyes? This much I say, this much is true! We must see red, but first see blue. Thirst and hunger, plague and flu Must come to pass before He makes all things new. (c) TROY JONES 2011 Thats me...yes I wrote this. Bollox Stand your ground. Nobody won anything by running away and leaving all behind, Save for dunkirque, and that was by an america that died decades ago. Now, it's hold fast, or hope has passed, either way, yer dead meat if you dont prevail If my survival depended on running away so that I could live to protect my family then it is not cowardly but wise. Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
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Anonymous Coward User ID: 1637298 United States 10/05/2011 11:43 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Any support for why you think it's crap? Example: the word "motif" doesn't quite work here. Seems not as accurate. Can't etch a motif. And motif of skin? What does that mean? It's still not crap, and no peom is ever finished. Motif definition, "a single or repeated design or color". In this case I used motif to describe a single design. so you can "etch a motif" A motif of skin meaning a single design etched onto the skin. As stated above a motif is "a single or repeated design or color". It can be carved repeatedly into your thoughts, your mind, a dream or a memory let alone your skin. This is a telling bit of prose and poetic in the picture it creates of a once great country that's becoming nightmarish to anyone who is awake. We are in a world poised for cataclysmic change and we each will decide what this means to us. Thank you Troy. |
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User ID: 1547630 United Kingdom 10/05/2011 11:47 PM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | an order for cigarettes will breach $330, Quoting: daretospeak know we've crossed the demarcation line. Thread: Starting and Growing Tobacco from Seeds. New Hope Seed Company: Bringing back old tobacco varities from days gone by. No hybrids... No GMO's |
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(OP) User ID: 1455775 United Kingdom 10/06/2011 12:38 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | an order for cigarettes will breach $330, Quoting: daretospeak know we've crossed the demarcation line. Thread: Starting and Growing Tobacco from Seeds. New Hope Seed Company: Bringing back old tobacco varities from days gone by. No hybrids... No GMO's Huh?????????? Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
daretospeak
(OP) User ID: 1455775 United Kingdom 10/06/2011 12:39 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Any support for why you think it's crap? Quoting: Anonymous Coward 1637298 Example: the word "motif" doesn't quite work here. Seems not as accurate. Can't etch a motif. And motif of skin? What does that mean? It's still not crap, and no peom is ever finished. Motif definition, "a single or repeated design or color". In this case I used motif to describe a single design. so you can "etch a motif" A motif of skin meaning a single design etched onto the skin. As stated above a motif is "a single or repeated design or color". It can be carved repeatedly into your thoughts, your mind, a dream or a memory let alone your skin. This is a telling bit of prose and poetic in the picture it creates of a once great country that's becoming nightmarish to anyone who is awake. We are in a world poised for cataclysmic change and we each will decide what this means to us. Thank you Troy. Not just your country....but the WORLD. Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
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(OP) User ID: 2756338 United Kingdom 10/06/2011 04:15 AM Report Abusive Post Report Copyright Violation | Who is mother shipton? Galatians 2:20 I have been crucified with Christ, it is no longer I that live, but Christ now lives in me and the life I live in the flesh, I live by faith in the Son of God, who loved me and gave Himself for me. |
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